Submitting Your Work

A Next Level Workshop

BREAKING INTO PRINT: The Art of Writing an Irresistible Query

You’ve written a novel or memoir, edited it, polished it till it shines, maybe shown it to a beta reader or two. Now you’re ready for the next step: finding a publisher. For writers who aspire to traditional publication by a major publishing house, that path typically begins with the search for a literary agent. Those who prefer small publishers may be able to submit to them directly. Either way, the first essential task is to persuade those gatekeepers to read your manuscript.

You do that by crafting an irresistible submission package, consisting of a query letter, synopsis, and the opening pages of your work. Agents receive hundreds of submissions each year and typically take on fewer than a dozen new clients. Time is the agent’s capital. They can’t read even a fraction of the manuscripts they’re pitched, so how do you persuade them to invest time on yours?

“Breaking into Print” is designed to help you do just that. This intensive three-week workshop will help writers edit their existing drafts into compelling, professional submission packages that stand out from the crowd and avoid the mistakes that sink the vast majority of submissions. A strong submission package will entice agents and editors to read. After that, it’s up to the book to sell itself, which is as it should be.

I was a literary agent for 14 years. Before that, I was an editor at one of the largest NYC publishers. During these years, I read more queries than I can possibly count, and I can tell you that people who read submissions for a living become, of necessity, very quick at sorting the wheat from the chaff. The three components of the submission package are designed to reveal essential faults in the work, so agents can quickly weed out work that is unlikely to prove publishable. A poorly worded query letter, riddled with grammatical errors, guarantees a manuscript of the same quality, and no one has time for that. Synopses can reveal problems including an incoherent plot, lack of a central, vital challenge for the protagonist, low stakes, problematic pacing and structural issues. Opening pages reveal how well the writer writes and how skillfully he/she commands the reader’s attention, essential factors in an agent or publisher’s decision.

If any of the three components is weak, the submission is likely to be rejected out of hand, and the book will never get a chance to make its case. Sometimes the rejected work really isn’t salable; most of what agents see is not. Other times it might be, but the submission package has failed to do it justice. Either way, the result is the same.

Gatekeepers use the query letter, synopsis, and opening pages to weed out unlikely prospects, but for skilled, savvy writers, those same elements provide a great opportunity to show what they can do.

The Goal

The goal of “Breaking Into Print” is to help participants to present their work in the best possible light, by strengthening each element of the query and avoiding the mistakes that trip up most aspiring writers. Demanding as they are, agents and publishers want to find writing they love; it’s what they live for. If your novel or memoir is ready for its close-up, this course will help you put together a compelling, professional submission package to showcase its strengths. If the work is not yet where it needs to be, if it has significant weaknesses, the course may reveal that. While that can be an upsetting realization, it allows the writer to address problem areas before sending the manuscript out to fend for itself.

How It Works

Over the course of three weeklong sessions, participants will submit their query letters, synopses and opening pages for critique by me and their fellow writers. There will be time to submit and get feedback on revised query letters, if desired. Each session will be accompanied by a lecture and discussion on various aspects of the agent/publisher search. Topics will include:

Query letter: elements and tone

  • Query letter fails: amateurish mistakes and ways to avoid them.
  • Demystifying the submission process through an insider’s view.
  • How to synopsize a full-length work in three or four pages.
  • How to format like a professional
  • How to think like a literary agent
  • How to put together a smart submission list
  • How (and how long) to persevere when rejected
  • How to recognize and avoid publishing scams
  • How to stay sane while submitting


  1. A complete or nearly complete draft of a novel or memoir
  2. A draft query letter
  3. A draft synopsis
  4. Enough time to read the lectures, participate in discussions, critique each other’s work, and edit your own: estimated 6 to 10 hours per week for three weeks.

Who Will Benefit

  • As-yet-unpublished novelists and memoirists
  • Experienced writers in search of new representation
  • Previously self-published writers seeking traditional publication

Whether you are preparing to submit for the first time, or you’ve been submitting with disappointing results, this workshop will help you put your book’s best foot forward.

Dates and Tuition

“Breaking Into Print” will begin on November 14, 2019. The duration is three weeks, but a few days will be added on to allow for a Thanksgiving break.  Tuition will be $195. For the 11/19 pilot course only, there will be a discounted tuition of $145.. To apply, or for additional information, please contact Barbara.